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Wet roses, sick with heavy rain,
Left from last night's slumber,
Smoking the breath of new days.

Swirling crimson sun, turning
Clouds kaleidoscopic in
Burning, dark rhythm.

Let the dew drip full of weight.
A whole morning magnified,
Inverted through liquid orb.

Solidify fiery decay.
Capture the meaning absorbed
Within chaos and abstraction.

In a glistening pool of water.
Lake akin to the forest fire,
Stiller, staying lower,

Ripples investing height
Upon the next day's shower.  
:icondude-im-alive:
Woah. Totally blown away by the reception this has got. Thank you all so much for your time for reading this and to all of those who favorited, for my sake of course, I'm really glad you liked it. After following critique from those kind people within the elite literature group, I've decided to reduce words and multiply meaning within my poems. It seems that this is the way forward and it does feel much better writing this way too. Really enjoyed making this one and the reception I've recieved has made me feel incredible and happy to write. Thanks to you all, this day has blown me away - the views and favorites. I will continue in this new style and see where it takes me. Thanks all!
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~Evalnia Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so well written. Very, very beautiful and painting - stunning.. just stunning!
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:icondude-im-alive:
:) thank you so much
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~Evalnia Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome :)
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*MistressofQuills Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
absolutely stunning work! i really love it!
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:icondude-im-alive:
Thank you very much :)
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*MistressofQuills Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome^^
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Wow! awesome poem :clap:
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*Lou-Sifer Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Okay could you have found a better picture for this? I think not it's absolutely amazing which suites the poems beautifully.

And I was also happy the read the description ^^
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